Ok that was good il iked it here are the headlines in my mind
1."Betrayed by her own heart" good rap up and final thought 10/10
2. "When he cried she cried." good begining shows the connection between them well 10/10
3. "Never truly on her own." decent restates the fact again that she was connected to him. 9/10
4. "She beleived his every word" ok now theres something allitle bit unknown so far she beleived him 10/10
5. "Until she lost all her feeling" now this is good it shows it was her feelings that deseived her and inderectly says she was inlove with him
and thats why he was able to desceive her (thats what I took out of it.)
The rest were good restates all were between 8-10/10
Final score 9/10