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ignorantelligence

arm the world with callowness
battle against open-thought
paint the sky in intelligence
watch them with belligerence
bewilder the mindless
sophisticate the simple
tolerate the violence
speak against the voiceless
tell us we're powerless
remind us you're bigger
throw us to the brainless
but remember, we forfeited our ignorance

Nice

That was really good.

I like the ending "Remind us your bigger,throw us to the brainless, but remember, we forfeited our ignorance.

It really locks your thought in and basicaly creates the bang at the end that it needs. The idea is good and the entire poem to me gets 9. The only thing is that it would be better with a longer more personal take on it.

Possbly some alliteration/assonace somewhere in there. I think that every poem needs alittle rhythme and rhyme.

  • By Anonymous at 04/14/2009 - 09:40
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Sorry i forgot to sign in!

That was me. I forgot to sign in. (It's not like it matters but i like ppl to know when im talkin to them.)

  • By theParAdOX at 04/14/2009 - 09:43
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I like it.

I like it.

  • By Soulkeeper at 03/28/2009 - 16:07
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